Thumbnails? Progress? What?

So I scanned in my thumbnailed comics and I'mma post them here because I'd love some advice...from anyone, really.  I wanted to see if the basic thumbnailed panels actually are somewhat legible.  They probably won't be, because of my sharpie-addled scribbles, but... oh well!

The skull creature is Tim the Monster, a character I've doodled around a few times.  Here's what he looks like when he's not a sharpie scribble, so you've got an idea of what he's supposed to look like...

and now, for the thumbnails!  Please, any critique would be rad amazing.  

Comics!

Unsurprisingly, I changed my mind regarding the story that I am going to try and write for the BAD TSA anthology.  However!  My new idea (actually my first idea, believe it or not!) is pretty well set up, and today I took what I think of as a pretty big step forwards; I thumbnailed out the whole thing.  So far it's coming out to six pages, which is good for me, although I might want to consider stuff like an opening page.... or where to put the title...or if I'm even going to include a title, which I probably should, all things considered.

All that being said... I probably shouldn't have thumbnailed the whole thing with sharpie.  The fumes might be...getting to me...